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Dawn has been coming,
The sky has unfurled,
The gate of the heavens,
Open up to the world.

The beauty of the skies,
It's thoughts are undreamed,
The mountain's high that block its sight,
The Infinite,
Has,
More than it seems.
©2005-2010 ~Trello
:icontrello:

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It is a poem written of the morning lights of dawn though the window of our poetry classroom, and themes still misunderstood.

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:iconminitsu:
Wawawa, that's nice~ Although I think the third line of the second stanza kind of throws off the rhythm... THEN AGAIN I was never good at poetry :<!
:icontrello:
Hey thanks for the critique, I kinda ran with whatever my mind was thinking that early in the day, but yeah I could do better haha, thanks for the comment :D
:iconfaera:
Sleepy morning poems are better than mine! I like it!...but You should expand more....I think!

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Still waters run deep...
:icontrello:
Yeah, the main thing I tried to get across in this one was the pausing that takes place at each punctuation. So it wasn't really meant for in depth poetry like I would normally try to do :p, I suppose I could have done better, but then again it was written on about 3-4 hours of sleep. hehe thanks though, and I'm sure your poems are better than this, being a fan of it I should know :D
:iconfaera:
Haha...I'm not a great poet actually. But I like writing, its something that allows my thoughts to turn to ink! Nevertheless, nice job!;)

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Still waters run deep...
:icontrello:
haha thanks. Your comments are always appreciated :D
:iconlexikinz:
beautimus ^^, i think i posted mine too, wen i was bored, but mine sucked, :p i like yours

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R.I.P. Mike Finley :heart:
May 9, 1989 - June 1, 2006
you will always be missed and i love you
:icontrello:
hey now, yours didn't suck. Mine is just something that swaggered into the classroom one sleepy morning.
:iconlexikinz:
lol, as is mine, and every one elses

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R.I.P. Mike Finley :heart:
May 9, 1989 - June 1, 2006
you will always be missed and i love you

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